Saturday, February 19, 2011

Saturday Centus - All I Didn't Know

Jenny Matlock
Wow, it's Saturday Centus time already.  Where did the last week go???  Here's the routine for those of you not familiar with the meme.   Grab the prompt, (it's in red in the body of my piece), and write a story using 100 words or less, not including said prompt.  Then pop over to Jenny Matlock's blog by clicking on the 'Centus' button above.  Follow the instructions to link your story and you're almost done.  I say almost, because once you're there you must go read all of the other wonderful submissions.  And don't forget to leave comments.  Folks have worked hard here, they need a few thumbs up or they'll stop writing.  And Saturday Centus will disappear.  And Miss Jenny will cry.  Then she'll get the hiccups and it will be your fault.  You don't want that on your conscience now, do you?

Now on to my story.  It's a tad dark this week, a place I usually don't go, but it just popped out! Just so you know it's so dark, that I needed a beer when I got finished.  But the doctor says no alcohol, so I had a glass of apple juice instead.  Just for the record, the apple juice didn't do it!


All I Didn't Know

When I said,  "I'd catch a grenade for ya," I didn't know you'd be the first to toss one at me.

I didn't know that a barrage would follow in the days, the weeks, the years to come.

I didn't know I couldn't save you from yourself.

I didn't know I would become hard like the bits of shrapnel that you embedded in my soul.

I didn't know that I would stop caring whether or not you could catch as well as you could throw.

I didn't know that I would leave.

PS:  I still really need a beer!  Hope I haven't caused anyone else to need one...

16 comments:

  1. I don't need a beer. Actually, I'm comforted. It's like you read my mind. I'm sure a lot of people could relate to this, Nancy. It's wonderful! Thank you.
    xoRobyn

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  2. Very good !!! What we don't know can really hurt !

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  3. Wow that's soul touching powerful writing there!
    I don't like beer but I'll do a shot with ya!~Ames

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  4. Very good poem. Actually, I can relate to this very well. It is as if you are reading my mind and writing about my life for the last 20 years.
    Great centus!
    Best wishes,
    Anna
    Anna's SC week 42 Maisy-Jane

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  5. The first sentence really grabs the reader, and phrases like "bit of shrapnel that you embedded in my soul" give this piece weight.

    Really good Centus.

    Namaste..........cj

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  6. This was very powerful. Yes, it's a bit dark, but it's a wonderful piece of writing. No beer here, just more coffee. Kat (if you let the apple juice sit for a while, maybe it will ferment LOL)

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  7. Make that two beers. This was an excellent take on the prompt.

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  8. A glass of wine...or beer! Great take on the prompt. Sometimes we don't realize that people cannot be there for us and they make our lives harder.
    Gems x

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  9. Sometimes it's good to know you don't live with a grenade launcher anymore.

    Good job!

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  10. Wow, very nice job. I liked this a lot Xx
    ~Michelle

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  11. Dear Nancy Jane,
    Thank you for visiting my SC-post. I'm back to say 'hi' again. Read your poem one more time. Yep, it still holds the second, third, fourth or even fifth read!
    Hugs,
    Anna
    My latest posts, in case anyone else is curious:
    Anna's SC week 42 Maisy-Jane

    Anna's AT-S, S is for Swedish Summer in books

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  12. Unique take on the prompt and very well done. I like the emotion it carries.

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  13. A slice of life that I can relate to...Apple juice won't do...but grape juice just might....loved that you created a story without the actual details.... :)

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  14. I want to know...by Joe something...do you remember that song? It so came to me while reading your great post! Nicely written!

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  15. Powerful and wonderful use of words.
    Donna V.

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  16. Powerful.

    I felt like you wrote this for me.

    I am sitting outside on a lovely Saturday afternoon reading these.

    I read your words and had to stop and look at the sky and try to find my center again.

    It's hard to understand how such innocent dreams of finding happiness turn into so much pain.

    Thank you.

    This post was a blessing.

    I wish I could give you a hug.

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